I crept into the cold garage and opened
the freezer.As soon as I lifted the lid opened,
I saw a snowman.He showed me a picture
of his home I saw a snowman wearing a
top hat.I saw shoes on the boy.I saw a
button on a snowman and saw a kid in a house. The snowman walked out of the
door and started to run after him I
his hand and we flew into the clouds
to go see santa in the forest.
Hi my name is Meka and I love what you did with the story. you should put less i saw because it is repeating. the details are amazing. I like the video. by Meka.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Taniora and my name is Francis and I go to St Pius X Catholic School. And Let's just say this was amazing! I loved the story and mostly the Snowman hope you can build on your punctuation but I liked the story. And I would like to see work like this again, Sincerely Francis.
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